Last night I had the worst dream of my life. it was about about monsters you will see what I am talking about soon. `Well it wasn’t really a dream it was a nightmare that started to be in real life . So it began when we moved houses into this really old house where this old man died so his grandsons sold the house to us when I went to sleep I had this nightmare whare this big fat lady with brown hair started walking down the hallway she couldn’t fit through my door.
She sent a really tall man with a blurry, dark face he was on the roof and his fingers started crawling down the window THUD! ‘*SCREAMS*’ SMASH! He broke the window he’s gonna kill me I thought to myself.
Then I woke up ‘oh thank goodness it was a dream’ then I heard something fall it was one of my trolls in my shelf then I looked up and saw a shadow changing shape that weird I thought it changed from what looked like a giant to the fat lady then on my wall was a shadow of a troll that looked like the one on the floor that fell then I saw the fingers of the tall blurry man on the window.
Hello Odin. I like how you have used some really good descriptive words in your writing. You have some really good ideas and I look forward to reading the rest of your work.I have tried reading all your work but found it difficult to do due to the writing being on a darker background. Maybe next time you could check to make sure that your work fits into the space.
ReplyDeleteHello Mrs Cassidy yea I don't know how to fix it. Btw this is based off a true story play my scratch games I have linked it in my genius hour blog post click on my games (the link) then scroll down until you see MHISAN click it then click the green flag in the top right corner then the rest of the controls are in game. bye!
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ReplyDeleteIts me Alexia from Wigram primary school.
I like the way you had a good idea in your mind. I also like the way of your sentence stared.
It reminded me of a time i read a ghost story about someone moving into a house where a man died in the house.
Next could you maybe add more description.
I wonder why your teacher had a topic sentence about this!.
I like your work. you could work on making more sentences.
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