My writing about The Cloud

This is my story about The cloud, before we started writing we had to watch the video carefully then think sbout how you would feel. Then once we started writing, we started adding puntuation, juciy words and make sure the sentence make sence. Once we had finished our story we had to post it on our blog, I hope you like my story and I hope you have a great time😺.

The cloud

Once upon a time, there once was an incredible, white, fat       cloud that was not like any other clouds. Other clouds in the group liked to destroy homes and make people homeless one day in Wellington, he was feeling sad for those people. That’s why he thought that he should help those people that need help. One day in the morning, every cloud moved to a country called Australia and that same cloud went to the city without any other clouds and looked for the people that needed help, but no one even needed his help. This cloud thought that he was special, he was kind, fluffy, helpful, brave, clever and friendly.

I was going on an adventure that was going to take a long period of time. I decided to leave straight away. I secretly snuck off to town, it was a nice sunny day  then I saw TNT. I thought that it would kill somebody  so I thought how I could destroy it. Then I saw an axe shop, I went to the axe shop straight away, I still had some money from my friend, I counted my money I had $246.80, woohoo I've got enough money for an axe. So I asked the man if I could buy a silver, glimmering, sparkly axe he said yes, I got 80 cents change I rushed outside my plan was to cut the TNT in half and take the gunpowder  out. So I rushed to the TNT and cut it in half the steel part of the axe touched the gunpowder  the sun reflected on the steel, then suddenly the steel started to heat up  the gunpowder then the TNT blew up,then BOOM!!!

         Tom True heart

Once upon a time I was in my house one strange night. I was in bed with my 6 brothers and brides.In the middle of the night I heard something. I closed my eyes and hid under my covers. then I heard a voice that said come on boys  I have the kids let's go. Then I jumped out of my bed and grabbed my sword and a light and a wooden shield. then put on a woolly jacket. Then I heard a van. I went outside  to chase the van then something fell out of it I pressed a button. poof! I was telepored to another dimension .

Just then I heard something. It was a giant, hairy,scary, disgusting crow I saw an old looking berry tree.  I decided to climb it and I took a red berry from the tree. Then I took a berry with me. I jumped out of the tree with the berry. The crow could smell the scent of the berry and came down to eat the berry so I quickly jumped on the crow.The crow was so fast I nearly fell off.

Then I saw an old, ancient looking castle.I jumped off the crow and walked into the castle. then right behind me was a humongous ,mysterious, hairy beast. I ran for my life.I saw a glow on my sword the glow got bigger and bigger. I touched it. I got an electric shock. I stopped running  from the beast. I threw a sword at the beast. That will save me some time. I found a key I took the key then I ran to a cage. I saw my brothers and brides. I unlocked  the cage got my bothers and brides lets go but the giant ,beast was after us we quickly got on the crow then got home.

The End.

My DLO

I have a video to show you how to solve hard questions and I hope you learn something from my video.

My learning in the class room

Last week Mr Maddren came to talk to us about being on the right place at the right time ready for learning.Here is my right place right time DLO.